VadisJedi VadisHonorary Staff Young Jedi Master
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Jedi Vadis on Feb. 26th, 2011 12:23 am
Please feel free to comment on CRASH!
Thank you,
Vadis
_________________ "Or those eighteen who died when the tower in Siloam fell on them—do you think they were more guilty than all the others living in Jerusalem? I tell you, no! But unless you repent, you too will all perish." Luke 13:4-5
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by AltaVista on Feb. 26th, 2011 7:31 pm
I'm liking it Vadis! Good job!
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Brato DuottStaff Emeritus Young Jedi Master
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Brato Duott on Feb. 26th, 2011 10:08 pm
Me likey! Very good!
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Verasol on Feb. 26th, 2011 11:16 pm
Awesome story man, can't wait to hear about his past!
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Rahvin3 on Feb. 28th, 2011 5:08 pm
This is great Vadis, I like Onora's character.
Although it seems strange having one Jedi referring to another as 'Boss'.
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Naandi on Feb. 28th, 2011 6:29 pm
I can't think of much more to add beyond what we've already talked about. I love the pacing and the whole feeling of the dream sequence. Vadis is certainly a man of mystery, and I think that's my favorite part. Well...no, I love his smart-aleck response to things a lot too. It makes him seem unique, especially since, even with his silliness, he seems like a completely dependable person. And yet someone with enough flaws to be believable. Yup! I like him. I look forward to seeing him under pressure. It's like, now that you've made your creation, let's test it's structural integrity under a little stress. Bwhahahaha.
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VadisJedi VadisHonorary Staff Young Jedi Master
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Jedi Vadis on Mar. 1st, 2011 11:16 pm
Thanks all for the comments, I appreciate them!
Rahvin3 wrote: | This is great Vadis, I like Onora's character.
Although it seems strange having one Jedi referring to another as 'Boss'. |
Agreed! But she is a companion after all who basically works for him so I "ok'd" Boss as appropriate.
_________________ "Or those eighteen who died when the tower in Siloam fell on them—do you think they were more guilty than all the others living in Jerusalem? I tell you, no! But unless you repent, you too will all perish." Luke 13:4-5
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Rahvin3 on Mar. 1st, 2011 11:56 pm
Jedi Vadis wrote: | Rahvin3 wrote: | This is great Vadis, I like Onora's character.
Although it seems strange having one Jedi referring to another as 'Boss'. |
Agreed! But she is a companion after all who basically works for him so I "ok'd" Boss as appropriate. |
Haha, yeah I agree, it is appropriate, but still.... 'unique'?
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VadisJedi VadisHonorary Staff Young Jedi Master
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Jedi Vadis on Mar. 2nd, 2011 12:25 am
Appreciate the compliment.
_________________ "Or those eighteen who died when the tower in Siloam fell on them—do you think they were more guilty than all the others living in Jerusalem? I tell you, no! But unless you repent, you too will all perish." Luke 13:4-5
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NexusLukeHonorary Staff Jedi Master
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by NexusLuke on Mar. 4th, 2011 8:56 pm
Very nice Vadis. You are becoming quite the story teller. Looking forward to more.
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VadisJedi VadisHonorary Staff Young Jedi Master
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re: Comments for CRASH!
by Jedi Vadis on Mar. 4th, 2011 11:35 pm
Thank you, Sir. I appreciate your encouragement. More to come...
_________________ "Or those eighteen who died when the tower in Siloam fell on them—do you think they were more guilty than all the others living in Jerusalem? I tell you, no! But unless you repent, you too will all perish." Luke 13:4-5
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